7/26/11

Lost

Kristen - hands

I get lost
Somewhere between coffee and breakfast
I got lost
I tumbled through cream rendered clouds
into the black caffeinated depths of an all-night diner
And there I was ensnared by the couple making love with their eyes
over juice and toast

I get lost
Somewhere between ordering hash-browns and dousing them in ketchup
I got lost
Before the first forkful found my mouth
A woman extracted herself from a cup of coffee
with a notebook and pen
Inky blue lines curled up from coffee-stained pages to ensnare me

I get lost
Somewhere between the gleam in your eye and the promise in your smile
I got lost
I tumbled into possibilities
Where I might go
Who I might be
If I don't let you take me home.

~Nara

I got lost too. Somewhere on the way to doing what I was supposed to do, my hand wandered to my pen, and the pen wandered to the page. I'm still trying to figure out what I'm trying to tell myself.

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17 comments:

  1. Excellent, I mean absolutely excellent! I read this and I believed I was in that diner, I was seeing all of it from the first person. I wanted him to take me home even. Absolutely excellent.

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  2. Inky blue lines curled up from coffee-stained pages to ensnare me
    "I’m still trying to figure out what I’m trying to tell myself." A great delve into the writing process.

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  3. ooh very romantic.. love the sensual imagery

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  4. I like this a lot and can relate to the part about feeling lost in the midst of all going on around you. Well written.

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  5. check please...time to go...smiles.

    ah you build this well, the first stanza a bit detatched but grows personal as you progress well played...really enjoyed this...

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  6. Oooo... naughty, naughty that's where you were getting lost inbetween the sheets of their eyes madam~! *winks...
    Fabulous writing, I almost felt like going to a coffee shop and getting lost in someone's eyes..... LOL

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  7. signed .............bkmJuly 26, 2011 at 12:51 PM

    What is the address of this coffee shop....I am going to make it my morning coffee stop...forget Starbuck's....bkm

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  8. I dare say a lovely place wander...you do not seem lost, but fully present to your creativity to me!

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  9. The power of poetry...you literally made me get up and put some hash browns into the pan!

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  10. Breakfast and poetry - I wanted to eat it up. Well done.

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  11. Breakfast and poetry - I wanted to eat it up. Well done.

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  12. I loved this piece, Nara. You're observing your surroundings with a poet's eye and heart. The repeated phrases, the keen observations tinted with personal impressions, all tied up with flow and language. I've gotta get me to this cafe more often! Thanks.

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  13. Loved the use of the words, "I get lost". So many faces they can mean.

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  14. I like the play with the refrain line in this piece and felt as I wandered with you. Lovely write ~ Rose

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  15. This is me first thing in the morning; sometimes it takes me hours to wake up.

    The end caught me by surprise - and reinforced your theme. The reader, by feeling momentarily disoriented, identifies with the narrator. (sounds like words find you whether you want them to or not...)

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  16. Very rythmic.

    A dynamic unravelling.

    Like a reaching hand trying to hold a stream of ungraspable solidity which liquifies and slips onward without you being able to grab onto before its just out of reach again.

    I may be projecting here? ha ha

    You have me thinking any way

    Great write

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